Its really good. I would like to try on this tattered coat

I adore the way it ends....

really nice luke .... very emotional and sentimental even if its not your feelings you really know what this romance stuff is all about ...
love your stuff

is this something you wrote on writers camp? whatever it is, i really like it.

I wrote the first stanza on writer's camp, but didn't knoww hat to do with it. I was sitting and playing around with ideas on Sunday night when I came up with the rest.

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Smurfs are asexual

Once again Luke, brilliant. I am a big fan of the "tattered coat of indecision".

"I looked into your
Slightly-less-than-perfect eyes,
and shot a simple smile.
I did love you
In reality."

I really enjoy that section. It paints a wonderful picture for me. A picture that changes everytime I re-read those lines. Nicely done.

fantastic poem!!! Do i recognise some Yeats imagery?

Lol...I hate having to put that kind of "this really isn't what I'm feeling or anything" warning before I post a depressing or sad or angry poem on here. Of course, if you don't you get lots of sympathetic comments about how everything will be ok, don't worry, aww, etc.

Oh yeah, the poem...Hee. It's great I read it three times, and came away with something a little different, a little deeper each time. I think what I like best about it is the sheer truth of that experience...the conflict between the idealistic dream we paint for ourselves, and the imperfect reality of life and love... what can we decide? It's not just giving up on a silly dream when we turn our backs on what we pretended we would have someday with someone...we truly believed it would come true, or it could, and we don't want to give it up.

I love the way you've expressed this so simply, but with a great mixture of vague uncertainty and clarity of thought. Wonderful job. Cheers~

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Tess ,'o-)

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